The reply of Mimi's teacher in her class

Hi, Mimi,

Your literacy narrative is really powerful. Through your growth as a reader, you have developed a love of Chinese adjectives and mystery stories. I would love to hear a comparison of how the adjectives available in each language affect description. You have inspired me to continue to pursue reading in another language.

When you mount a defense of Persephone, you support your argument by using four logical pieces of evidence from the text. Good work! One thing I would like you to consider is the importance of the audience. You are speaking to father Zeus, Persephone’s voice is restrained and diplomatic. She doesn’t try to move Zeus by pleading or begging. She seems to respect her audience. Was this your intention?

You may consider introducing a counterclaim to refute. For example, some may say that Hades helps Zeus maintain his rule by managing one of the three realms. Therefore, Zeus needs to support the decisions Hades makes. How could Persephone argue that Zeus’s decision to let Hades have her diminishes his rule, rather than strengthens it?

In your reply, you explain what you liked about Koharu’s response. You focus on how he captured the voice of Persephone and made his response readable. Good work! You analyzed the choices he made. You demonstrated that you know what is expected in the forum. I think going forward, the discussion forum should be a place to visit a couple of times a week to keep up with the discussion. Responding specifically and enthusiastically to a classmate’s writing is encouraged. Other times, you will have a textual point to explain.

Thank you, Mimi!